February 27, 2014
December 20, 2013
Here are the most best things I wrote this past year. I think this averages out to one great piece per week. I am pleased by this.
A look at the musical MARY POPPINS and P.L. Travers’ original books (done in Feb., before SAVING MR. BANKS came out)
LOCAL NORTH CAROLINA ARTS
COMICS I WROTE:
MISC. ESSAYS/ORIGINAL COMPILATION POSTS
November 21, 2013
The conclusion to my ADVENTURE TIME story with artist Brad McGinty, “Grocery Time,” is out in stores this week in ADVENTURE TIME #22!
You can buy an e-copy on ComiXology here.
To answer two possible questions:
1) Yes, Part One ran two months ago in issue #20. No, I don’t know why it didn’t run on consecutive months. The story WAS finished when we turned it in, but there are a limited number of pages for backups and it can be very tricky to figure out how to use the space. I appreciate KaBOOM! letting us do this story and have no ill will over this.
2) No, I probably won’t be doing more AT stories in the future. KaBOOM! has made it clear they have a large number of writers and artists doing such tales and don’t have room for more material at this time. I have some more pitches to them being considered by Cartoon Network for approval, but it could be a while before there’s room for any of them. Again, it was a great opportunity and I have no bad feelings — it’s just how the business works.
Additionally, Brad McGinty ALSO has a story in REGULAR SHOW #6, which is out today. He is a brilliant, brilliant artist and we’re working on a creator-owned miniseries pitch for another publisher. At this point, I’m trying to deliver a polished full script for the first issue along with a full miniseries pitch, and Brad’s finishing up a few other projects before doing character designs, so it’s going to be a while before it can even be CONSIDERED for publication. But I truly hope to get this or another project together, not just for the career boost (no shame in my game), but for the excitement of seeing my weird ideas being brought to con’sid’ra’ble life by Brad’s Brobdingnaggian talents (look it up, I was tired of saying “Herculean”).
A few notes on the story, though this is more of a “What NOT to do” when writing a script.
1) Out of all the pitches I sent KaBOOM!/Cartoon Network, this was the one they took, and once I sat down to write it, I realized I’d hosed myself, as I had to introduce new characters, new settings, a plot with a beginning/middle/end AND an action sequence in a mere seven pages (they gave me eight, bless them). So is this story rushed, and did I take a few shortcuts? You bet your bippy I did.
2) So first, it was great fun writing the fight sequence. Fight/action scenes are just about trying to find unique ways for the characters to act and react, and Brad did a very fun job pitting Billy against the Ham-Pire. I had fun thinking of things the Ham-Pire could do, but I wish I’d thought of more unique ways for Billy to fight back using the materials of the Grocery Kingdom.
3) I also feel great, great shame for resorting to the cheapest dues ex machina in the book — the hero finds a MAGICAL REMOTE CONTROL to take over the evil robots. Now, if you read both parts of the story in one sitting, I did try to establish this back on Pg.3 by introducing the cereal box display, but man, I wish I’d thought of something better to get to the denouement. I ran this by a number of friends, including a few cartoonist who work on ADVENTURE TIME, and they said to stop worrying, but I NEVER STOP WORRYING.
4) In a random bit, the Royal Tart Toter is a check-out clerk in the Grocery Kingdom, because I keep encountering tragically old, sometimes demented old people as greeters at big-box stores whenever I go there. Brad wanted a few more clerks for the background, so we went with the Squeez-E-Mart clerk and Choose Goose, who presumably had a slow season in his trading business or needed health insurance.
5) The last page is PACKED, which is a sure sign of a novice comic book writer. Kelly Sue DeConnick had a semi-seminar at a comic shop earlier this year where she made a point that you should try to wrap as much as possible up BEFORE the last page, so you have some room. Given the hole I’d dug myself with this script, there wasn’t a lot of room. I tried to have a short story type twist for Billy’s quest, but it got MORE cramped by the final-final image…
6) So the story ends with the revelation that it’s a tale being read to Baby Finn and Baby Jake by Joshua the Dog-Dad. I wanted to do this to give the story a cute moment amidst all the silliness and propose an addition to the show’s mythology — Finn and Jake learned about Billy because Joshua read them stories as kids, and this probably helped inspire them to grow up to be heroes themselves.
Acknowledging the page was already cramped in the script, I initially wrote this scene as optional, but regular AT comic writer Ryan North said that as the writer, I should say whether something was in the story or not, and that the scene was good and deserved to be in there. I still like it, but wish that I’d found a way to give it more room to breathe and sink in. I did like having a nice, placid moment to end all the craziness of the story.
Brad wanted an extra panel to contain Joshua’s final rant and suggested an exterior shot of the house. In the episode “Memory of a Memory,” Finn’s childhood home is depicted as a different place, but there’s no exterior shots of it. We figured that since “Dad’s Dungeon” showed that Joshua had built a dungeon near the Tree Fort and hid a holo-viewer in its attic, perhaps the Dog family had moved there or leased it from previous owner Marceline (that’d be a fun story to tell). It’s a cheat, but the story does play fast and loose with AT mythology in the interest of including cameos anyway.
So now you know…too much of the story. Hope you liked it, and hopefully I’ll have a few more comics finished in 2014, with both Brad and others among the Finest Artists Known to Man!
September 26, 2013
As anyone who knows me knows, I’m sort of a sociopathic fan of Cartoon Network’s series ADVENTURE TIME. It represents something truly imaginative, inventive and spontaneous — not to mention fun!
Having recently gotten to do AN ACTUAL ADVENTURE TIME STORY for issue #20 of the KaBOOM! ADVENTURE TIME comic (order it here!) , I thought I’d share with you some of the best pieces from my collection of ADVENTURE TIME art. My full collection is online in this gallery.
Here are some of the best pieces, with commentary.
First, I’ve been lucky enough to get some art from many of the talented people who work on the show, including creator Pendleton Ward…
,,,Andy Ristaino, who’s done many of the character designs and now writes for the show….
…and a couple pieces by Jesse Moynihan, who’s written/storyboarded many of the most surreal episodes and does the FORMING webcomic. Here’s a piece Jesse did of the Ancient Psychic Tandem War Elephant, one of my favorite one-off characters from the show.
I also did a trade with Jesse for one of the most unique pieces in my collection. With each new episode that airs, the writers/artists on the show do a unique drawing they post on the show’s Tumblr that relates to the events of the episode. This is from “Reign of Gunters” (originally “Gunthers”) showing Finn reading the pick-up artist book “Mind Games” by “J.T. Dawgzone” (later changed to “Jay T. Doggzone.” This includes the only known appearance of “Dawgzone” to date, on the book’s back cover.
And here is Marceline the Vampire Queen by Rebecca Sugar, who wrote/storyboarded many of the best Marceline episodes (“It Came From the Nightosphere,” “What was Missing,” “I Remember You,” “Simon and Marcy”) and also wrote many of Marceline’s songs. Sugar has left the series to do her own show, the upcoming STEVEN UNIVERSE, but it was a great thrill to get a piece from one of the creators who helped define this character and created some of the show’s most emotional moments. This is also signed by Olivia Olson, the voice of Marceline.
Marceline has been one of the characters artists most want to draw from the show. One of the first pieces I got for my collection was a drawing of her by Kate Beaton, the genius cartoonist behind HARK! A VAGRANT. It is also signed by Olivia Olson.
Here’s a walnut-ink commission of Marceline by Ethan Nicolle, creator of the webcomic and animated series AXE COP.
And here’s Marceline by Brandon Graham of Image Comics’ PROPHET and such surreal SF delights as KING CITY and MULTIPLE WARHEADS.
A very nice piece of Marceline and Jake by Nathasha Allgeri, who created Fionna and Cake for ADVENTURE TIME and did the amazing short BEE AND PUPPYCAT for Cartoon Hangover on YouTube.
And I just got this stunning commission by Robbi Rodriguez, where Marceline rocks out big time.
In addition, it’s been great fun getting artists with a wide variety of styles to bring those styles to the different characters from the show.
For example, Chester Brown, whose tales often deal with very, very dysfunctional looks at relationships, did a dynamite job with this melancholy Ice King.
Brown’s good friend and contemporary Seth, who beautifully captures a wintry sense of melancholy in his work, brought a nice dignity to Ice King’s human alter ego, Simon Petrikov.
James Harren, who does more horror/fantasy type work, blew me away with this terrifying take on Marceline’s Dad, Hunson Abadeer.
Ramon Perez did an unforgettably gross variation on Ricardio, the Heart Guy.
Here’s a wry Ancient Psychic Tandem War Elephant by Jennifer Hayden…
…and a super-adorable Buff Baby Finn by Katie Cook, who writes the MY LITTLE PONY: FRIENDSHIP IS MAGIC comic.
Becky Dreistadt, who does the amazing TINY KITTEN TEETH comic, did this beautiful Fionna and Cake, and has gone on to do a number of stories and covers for the AT comic.
And Lucy Knisley, who’s done some Fionna and Cake comics, did this very sweet piece.
Jeffrey Brown did this take on BMO “playing with itself”…
…while Andy Runton of OWLY did this piece of BMO playing with Jake and Lady Rainicorn’s offspring. PUPPIES!
Tom Fowler, who does all sorts of surreal fantasy characters, did a hulking take on Billy the hero.
And Jeremy Bastian of CURSED PIRATE GIRL did this nasty Ice Queen, which was colored by Beck Seashols.
Janet K. Lee of RETURN OF THE DAPPER MEN brought her dapper style to Peppermint Butler, her favorite character from the show.
And Pen Ward himself praised this piece of the Earl of Lemongrab by Jeff Lemire, who did a most ACCEPTABLE! job.
The Lich (or the Lich King, as originally pitched), is very popular with creators who have a more horror-based style, as his countenance of PURE EVIL really lets them do some nightmarish work.
This is by Charles P. Wilson III of THE STUFF OF LEGEND.
This one is by Nathan Fox, and hews closer to the character’s animated design.
Duncan Fegredo, who’s done many of the Hellboy comics with Mike Mignola, combined a few different looks for this grayscale commission.
And Ted Naifeh of COURTNEY CRUMRIN did one with its roots in classic mythology — there’s sort of a folktale, Middle Ages quality to this one.
And finally, here’s Finn and Jake themselves by the Spanish cartoonist Liniers. This just makes me happy!
I’ve gotten a lot of great pieces, though I might stop soon — my personal goal is 200 different artists, and I’m already up to about 180! (there’s a few repeat artists and a couple updated/colored pieces in my gallery)
Again, you can check out my full collection of stuff here!
August 24, 2013
And now for a special presentation!
This Wednesday, August 28, sees the release of REGULAR SHOW #3 from KaBOOM!. It is the first comic I have written that has appeared in a hard-copy form that you can buy in comic book stores and have to pay money to get.
STREET CRED, yo.
Well, I only wrote eight pages of the comic. But due to some last-minute shuffling, it’s now the LEAD story and the first thing you see when you open the issue. Hmm hmm! Hmm!
And if you enjoy the superhumanly awesome art of Brad McGinty on this story, you can buy all eight pages of the original art for $2,060.04 here. That’s a pretty good deal. Come to think of it, I need $2,060.04 myself, plus bennies so I can get those pages and have ‘em framed on the wall.
If you really like that art, you’ll be happy to know that Brad and I will be doing the backup story for ADVENTURE TIME #20 next month, AND Brad will also be doing another REGULAR SHOW tale with…I dunno, some other writer in a future issue!
We’re aiming to do more backups and possibly a miniseries, but let’s see if people actually like this before we go buggin’ KaBOOM! and Cartoon Network to let us keep playing with their characters.
Anyway, I’m very proud of this story and it got a thumbs-up from none other than REGULAR SHOW CREATOR JG QUINTEL HIMSELF.
So here’s some sweet behind-the-scenes material for the dozens, yes dozens of you who are likely curious about how I became a comic book rock star or whatevs.
It was a complicated process that worked like this:
1) I did my own comic, THE STARS BELOW, that had good art and took like two minutes to read. This was a good writing sample.
2) Relentless-yet-polite harassment of the KaBOOM! editors I knew.
3) Pitched like 10 ideas. They took this one (also the idea “Bad Grammar,” which was rejected at script stage by Cartoon Network. You can read that script here)
4) Convinced Brad McGinty, who I’d met at Heroes Con, that i could maybe write a decent script for him. KaBOOM! dug his jive. Baby, we had a stew goin’!
SO WHERE DID YOU GET YOUR IDEA FOR THIS , ZACK?
For years, I have been obsessed with South of the Border, a faux-Mexican tourist trap on I-95. it is advertised with relentless day-glo billboards with relentless bad jokes and horrifying, sometimes racist “Mexican” puns. There are something like 150 of those billboards, and when you’re stuck on a desert highway, there is little to do but obsess over them, especially if you’re a bored kid stuck in the back seat in the days before they had DVD monitors in cars to pacify little monsters.
Once you get there, there’s a giant Eiffel Tower replica with a sombrero on top and…not much else, beyond cheap trinkets and broken-down rides. But there’s a certain joy to having gotten there, especially if you weren’t able to get your parents to stop when you were younger and in the backseat.
I had actually done another comic story parodying SotB years ago, but the lovely art was covered up by my excessive dialogue and the joke required people to already be aware of the place. When the opportunity came to pitch some REGULAR SHOW stories, I realized this was a chance for a do-over.
If you don’t watch the show (you should; it won an Emmy), it’s pretty simple: Mordecai and Rigby are a blue jay and a raccoon who work at a park, under the auspices of a living gumball machine named Benson. Every episode, some “regular” task (setting up chairs, asking out a girl, etc.) devolves into some massive conflict that involves fistfights, explosions, and the occasional unraveling of reality.
There are also many, many references to 1980s popular culture. This was my bag.
As such, South of the Border was the kind of thing that the ADD-afflicted Mordecai and Rigby would gravitate towards — a temptation while stuck in a car on some boring task. And I thought of a way to escalate this in the typical RS manner for a good apocalyptic showdown — I’ll tell you more about this in a moment.
Ironically, REGULAR SHOW wound up airing an episode called “Firework Run” involving a fireworks place called “South of the Line,” after I made this pitch. I was sure Cartoon Network would reject the story because it was too similar to that episode! But they wound up taking it anyway. They’re very different types of stories; “Firework Run” is more of a parody of Mexico-set crime films, while this is more of a straight-up parody of South of the Border-the-park.
KaBOOM! initially gave me six pages to tell the story. I got to Page 6 and found I had like five pages worth of story left. They generously gave me eight pages instead, and I found a way to cut it back. There were a number of ideas that I didn’t get to, which I’ll tell you about, even though they weren’t good.
So here’s my full script to “Sombrero World,” not the final draft, so I can note the revisions and cut jokes. You might find this useful, maybe, possibly.
Zack Smith Regular Show Sombrero World Third Draft
PANEL ONE: BIG PANEL showing the billboard for SOMBRERO WORLD, a crazy faux-Mexican tourist trap. MORDECAI AND RIGBY are looking up at it through the windshield of the park’s pickup truck with Mordecai driving. Mordecai absently holds a cell phone in his hand. CREDITS appear below the billboard.
The billboard is a parody of such tourist traps as South of the Border in Dillon, South Carolina. For reference, here’s a photoset my boy Chris Sims took of his trip to South of the Border, as whatever bad puns I think of cannot match the actual power of the real tourist trap. Here is also a report of his trip with photos.
Go crazy with the design of this. It is essentially done up in neon colors like hot pink, and incorporates a sombrero motif. There is also a mascot called PONCHO, who is a blond-haired, white, obviously-non-Hispanic surfer dude wearing a poncho and a giant sombrero. His name is on the poncho.
JUST 150 MILES AHEAD:
PRETTY MUCH THE MOST AWESOME PLACE EVER!
MORDECAI AND RIGBY: (shared word balloon) WHOOOOOAAA.
BENSON: (on phone) …hello?
(ZACK NOTES: Okay, here’s where Brad McGinty is a great artist — I originally scripted this as a shot from INSIDE the truck, but Brad changed it to an outside shot, creating a nice POV and a real sense of movement and action.
(In the first draft of the script, the entire first page was Mordecai and Rigby in the truck talking to Benson on the phone, ending with the first billboard coming into view. The idea was to establish the boring desert and the job the characters had to do, then introduce the distraction, but the editor suggested immediately introducing Sombrero World to create the conflict — Mordecai and Rigby want to stop there, but want to prove to Benson that they can do an important job. This was a good move, because it created a visual element to underscore the action, Mordecai and Rigby being distracted by the signs. SCRIPTWRITING!)
PANEL TWO: We’re outside the truck, looking at Rigby pressing the face against the window, awestruck by the billboard (perhaps Poncho is reflected in the mirror). Mordecai has snapped out of his trance and is on the phone with Benson.
MORDECAI: Oh, sorry Benson! We were just saying how much we appreciate your trusting us to take the cart to the dealer’s…
RIGBY: (small) …it is the most radical of empires to all that which is radical.
(ZACK NOTES: Rigby’s line was from the BEAVIS AND BUTT-HEAD episode “Babes R Us;” it was changed in the revisions from JG Quintel to what you see in the final story)
PANEL THREE: Reveal BENSON on the other end of the phone, in bed with a broken leg. He looks about as sour as you’d expect. There might be some balloons and condolence cards there, possibly one that reads, “GET WELL SOON! – AUDREY.”
MORDECAI (on phone): …I mean, because you’re sick and literally everyone else was unavailable…
(ZACK NOTES: Okay, here’s where a cut joke came in. It was a “Kill Your Darlings” situation, because I was high on this one, but it slowed down the story when every panel needed to count.
(The original version read like this:
MORDECAI (on phone): …I mean, because you’re sick, Skips is on walkabout, Thomas has a final, Pops’s sinuses can’t take the desert and Muscle Man and Hi 5 Ghost are at that concert…
PANEL FOUR: Cut to MUSCLE MAN and HI 5 GHOST at a crazed outdoor music festival that’s basically the Gathering of the Juggalos. Muscle Man and Hi 5 Ghost are both painted like Insane Clown Posse, but with the black-and-white parts of the face paint reversed.
Muscle Man has ripped off his shirt and is twirling it above his head. If room, other recurring characters (perhaps the Guardians of Eternal Youth) are nearby face-painted as well.
MUSCLE MAN: WHOO! WHOO! LAST ONE IN THE MUD PIT’S A JUGGA-LOSER!
(I had an alternate version to THAT where a face-painted Muscle Man and Hi-5 Ghost went to a “Gathering of the JUGGLERS” and MM went, “Aw man…read the flyer wrong.”
(Eh, maybe in another tale.)
PANEL FOUR: Back to Moredecai and Rigby with a long shot of the pickup truck on the highway with the broken cart in the back…and a billboard ahead reading “SOMBRERO WORLD: STOP OR YOU’RE LAME.”
BENSON: (on phone) Look, I just need you slackers to stay completely focused on this task…
BENSON: (on phone) …guys?
PANEL FIVE: High-angle shot looking down on the truck with billboards for Sombrero World on both sides of the road. Mordecai hastily covers on the phone while a wide-eyed and entranced Rigby has his head out the window like a dog.
BENSON: (on phone) GUYS!
MORDECAI: Oh! Hey, Benson! Still here!
BENSON: (on phone) I KNEW IT! You’ve gotten distracted already!
PANEL SIX: Back to Benson in bed as he screams red-faced into the phone.
BENSON: THAT’S IT! I’ve got the number for the dealership RIGHT HERE! I’m calling it in THREE HOURS and you’d better pick it up…
PANEL ONE: Mordecai and Rigby are about blown away by Benson’s yelling at them through the phone (the skin around their eyeballs blows back)
BENSON (on phone, HUGE): OR YOU’RE FIRED!!!!!
(ZACK NOTES: Weirdly, one of the first things I wanted to do when I got to write a REGULAR SHOW story was split one of Benson’s “…OR YOU’RE FIRED!” rants across two pages as a mini-cliffhanger. I have no idea why.)
PANEL TWO: Mordecai and Rigby look ticked as they drive on; there’s a blurred-image double-take effect to show Rigby getting distracted and looking out the window mid-sentence.
From this point on, a TICKING CLOCK is visible in each panel.
MORDECAI: Man…Benson’s such a crank.
RIGBY: Yeah, man! Why can’t he just trust us to OH MY GOSH LOOK
(ZACK NOTES: Yeah, the ticking clock got cut almost immediately. Midway through the script, I realized it was a pain to figure out how much time had passed between panels, and Brad McGinty correctly pointed out that almost every panel was packed anyway. There was enough going on to create suspense already. Also, JG Quintel revised Mordecai’s line.)
PANEL THREE: Mordecai and a frantic Rigby look up at another billboard featuring Poncho. He looks slightly sick and has a stomach pump hooked up to him as he gives a thumbs-up with one hand and holds a fish taco (literally a whole fish in a taco shell, with Xs for eyes and flies hovering over it) in his other hand.
ALL YOU CAN EAT FISH TACOS!
NOW WITH ON-SITE STOMACH PUMP!
ONLY AT…SOMBRERO WORLD!
RIGBY: MORDECAI! WE HAVE TO STOP THERE! THEY HAVE TACOS!
PANEL FOUR: Mordecai irately swats away an over-excited Rigby.
MORDECAI: No way, dude! We’ll be lucky to make Benson’s deadline as is!
PANEL FIVE: Rigby listens intently as a stern Mordecai lectures him…
MORDECAI: Look, dude, Sombrero World looks awesome, but there’s something more important…
MORDECAI: …getting this job done with no shortcuts, no distractions…AND TOTALLY RUBBING IT IN BENSON’S FACE.
MORDECAI: It would BLOW HIS MIND.
PANEL SIX: Mordecai and Rigby exchange a confident look:
MORDECAI AND RIGBY (together): HMM HMM! HMM!
PANEL SEVEN: BIGGEST PANEL OF THE PAGE: The truck drives on…as we see dozens and dozens of Sombrero billboards on the horizon waiting to tempt them.
(ZACK NOTES:: Brad McGinty condensed this into fewer panels easily; I also just remembered that part of this plot was my wanting to do a couple variations on REGULAR SHOW plots; first, by having Mordecai and Rigby getting into trouble for NOT slacking off, and second, to give them a bit of a do-over from an episode called “Busted Cart,” where they bonded with Benson on a cart exchange but wound up blowing things by playing video games. I disliked the characters for that, and wanted them to do the job right this time, because…I’m weird.)
PANEL ONE: This is a big SPLASH PANEL that takes up about 2/3 of the page.
It is done like a placemat from a cheesy diner showing a map of the highway, Mordecai and Rigby in the truck, and the route toward Sombrero World, with the cart dealership at the end. A dotted line follows Mordecai and Rigby’s path. Sombrero World appears like a big city shaped a sombrero with sombrero-towers.
Each of the Sombrero World signs should have a slightly closer mileage and convey something that is silly and stupid but sort of appealing, especially to Mordecai and Rigby, and occasionally feature Poncho. I’m open to suggestions, but here are some of the ideas I have:
-CLASSIC VIDEO GAMES! SOME ACTUALLY WORK!
-OUR MINI-GOLF COURSE! NOW 17% WEED FREE!
-TAKE A SIESTA WITH PONCHO!
-$2 FOOTLONG HOAGIES! MADE WITH FRESH WEEK-OLD MEAT!
-PECAN LOGS! GUARANTEED TO INDUCE INSULIN SHOCK OR YOUR MONEY BACK!
-Some novelty sombreros, including one covered in light-up neon, one with a working roulette wheel in it, a razor-tipped one Poncho is throwing like Oddjob in James Bond, one with a chip-dip thing in its brim (like the “Nacho Hat” from that Simpsons episode) where you can reach up and dip chips into the dip in your hat; a rocket sombrero (the rocket is in the middle part of the hat and Poncho is flying upside-down), one that’s designed like a crystal chandelier, one that’s designed like a juicer, where you squeeze an orange/lemon against the middle part, one with a satellite dish and a fold-down TV screen that goes in front of your eyes.
Imposed over the map are two Hitchcock-like images of Mordecai and Rigby’s heads, sweating bullets and mouths agape as they are tormented by this cavalcade of temptation. There is also an image of their hands clasped in solidarity.
(ZACK NOTES: So this came about in collaboration with Brad McGinty; I realized one difference between REGULAR SHOW on TV and in a comic is that the show has a few minutes at the start of each episode to establish the “regular” situation, and also to do a “time passing” montage to build up to the climax, and both those things are very difficult to pull off in a comic book with static panels and a limited page count.
(My first idea was to create something like a nightmare montage with floating billboards and Mordecai and Rigby sweating bullets, but I left the sequence open to Brad for suggestions. He came up with the placemat map idea…and then asked for some extra billboard gags. I wrote like 50, figuring he’d use five….and he used ALL of them and asked for more.
(That’s how crazy-good Brad McGinty is. Hire him for things and give him money!)
PANEL TWO: From inside the truck, we see Sombrero World through the windshield as a crazed Rigby tries to grab the steering wheel from Mordecai…
RIGBY: AAAAHHH! I CAN’T TAKE IT! STOP, MORDECAI! STOP!!!
MORDECAI: No, Rigby! We’ve almost made it!
PAGE FOUR: –NOTE: WILL ADD TICKING CLOCK IN LATER
PANEL ONE: Mordecai pushes away Rigby with one hand while steering with the other.
RIGBY: But…but…TACOS, Mordecai! TACOS!
RIGBY: PONCHO WANTS US TO STOP!!!!!
MORDECAI: We’re nearly there, Rigby! We just need…
PANEL TWO: The truck is just at the entrance to Sombrero World, with a cheesy statue of Poncho holding a sign that reads, “PONCHO SAYS WELCOME, DUDE!”
MORDECAI: (from inside truck) …to hold on…
PANEL THREE: …the truck has zoomed PAST the entrance…and the Poncho statue has turned to stare at its cloud of dust in disbelief.
TINY SFX: WHIRRRR
MORDECAI: (from off-panel) …a little longer!
PANEL FOUR: Back in the truck – Rigby has his hands on the back window in agony while Mordecai looks in the rear-view mirror.
RIGBY: NOOOOOOO!!!!! PONCHOOOO!!!!!!
MORDECAI: AWWWWWW YEAAAAAHHHH-UUUUHHH!
(ZACK NOTES: Rigby doesn’t have much to do in this story other than react to Mordecai and the chaos around them, but Brad really did a great job with the character’s facial expressions, and that made Rigby one of my favorite parts of the story. Brad’s work is so detailed and crazy that it’s easy to overlook that he does great facial expressions and body language, which is something you really need for a comedy story.)
PANEL FIVE: Exterior shot of the truck zooming by Sombrero World…and a giant black billboard that reads, “WAIT! WHAT DO YOU THINK YOU’RE DOING?!”
MORDECAI: (from inside truck) Who’s tha may-ahn? Who’s tha may-ahn? Who’s tha may-ahn with tha master play-ahn?!
PANEL SIX: Small shot of Rigby looking back as Mordecai celebrates…
MORDECAI: Who’s the man of the hour all full of will-POW-YAH?! OOOOOOOHHHHHH!
RIGBY: Uh, Mordecai…?
(ZACK NOTES: JG Quintel rewrote Mordecai’s mini-rap into the dialogue seen in the final story.)
PAGE FIVE: — WILL ADD IN TICKING CLOCK LATER
PANEL ONE: BIGGEST PANEL OF THE PAGE…Sombrero World has lifted up out of the ground on giant spider-legs (think Howl’s Moving Castle or the metal spider from that awful Wild Wild West movie). We can now clearly see a number of cool things on it, like a water slide, a Ferris wheel, a roller-coaster…all stuff that incorporates the sombrero motif. Some hapless TOURISTS are clinging on for dear life. The head/face is a robotic version of Poncho with glowing eyes.
RIGBY : (from inside truck) …I don’t think Sombrero World WANTS us to drive past!
PANEL TWO: Close on Mordecai and Rigby SCREAMING as we see the looming park-spider-monster in the background.
MORDECAI AND RIGBY: AAAAAHHHHHH!
SOMBRERO WORLD: PONCHO SAYS…TURN AROUND. NOW.
(ZACK NOTES: Not much to add, except this panel is PRETTY MUCH THE ENTIRE REASON I WANTED TO WRITE THIS STORY.)
PANEL THREE: A giant foot from the park-spider SMASHES into the highway as the truck heads for an exit reading “CART DEALERSHIP.”
BIG WALT SIMONSON-STYLE SFX: DOOOM!
PANEL FOUR: The truck heads down a ramp, where a Sombrero World billboard featuring a bunch of dead-eyed lizards is on the side of the road (some are tilted slightly, obviously not alive and propped up). It reads “COME VISIT OUR NEW REPTILE PARK! SOME LIZARDS EVEN ALIVE!” The lizards’ eyes are all lit up like the terrifying laser statues from The Nevernding Story.
RIGBY: (from inside truck) Look out!
PANEL FIVE: Close on the billboard as the eyes FIRE at them!
(ZACK NOTES: I sort of regret this gag; it doesn’t work as well with everything else going on. Brad still drew it well)
PAGE SIX – WILL ADD IN TICKING CLOCK LATER
This alternates some bigger panels of action with smaller panels that are close on the characters.
PANEL ONE: On the road, as we see the truck weave back and forth (a curved dust trail indicates their path) as it dodges LASER FIRE from various BILLBOARDS (we don’t have to see them, just enough to suggest this is where the lasers are coming from).
RIGBY: (from inside truck) Don’t go straight! SERPENTINE! SERPENTINE!
(ZACK NOTES: Yes, this is a reference to the 1979 comedy THE IN-LAWS, one of my favorites)
PANEL TWO: Sombrero World foot SMASHES into the ground in front of the truck, which awkwardly changes its path.
PANEL THREE: Close on the robot-Poncho head, whose eyes are glowing red Terminator-style…
PONCHO: PONCHO SAYS WHY NOT RELAX…
PANEL FOUR: Poncho-bot sneers as CANNONS emerge from it, firing giant PECAN LOGS at our heroes!
PONCHO: …WITH A TASTY PECAN LOG?
(ZACK NOTES: Yeah, another joke that doesn’t really work. There’s not enough room in the story to clearly see it’s a pecan log missile.)
PANEL FIVE: In the truck, Mordecai jacks the wheel left!
MORDECAI AND RIGBY: WHOOOOAAAAA
PANEL SIX: BIG PANEL: GIANT PECAN LOGS splatter against either side of the truck! One has felled a tree!
PANEL SEVEN: In the truck, Rigby is freaked and Mordecai is determined…
RIGBY: WE’RE GONNA DIE!
MORDECAI: Don’t worry, dude…
PANEL EIGHT: Close on Mordcai’s eyes, narrowed like a BAD DUDE.
MORDECAI: …I have a plan.
(ZACK NOTES: Okay, so Mordecai’s plan was a little more elaborate in my initial vision.
(There were two ideas that didn’t make it into the final story. One was the idea that Mordecai and Rigby had known about Sombrero World in the past and wanted to stop there as kids, and you’d have a flashback with Li’l Mordecai and Li’l Rigby in the backseat begging the unseen parents in the front seat to stop, and later, you’d have another flashback with Mordecai and Rigby fighting over something and not noticing that the parents were screaming about lasers and such.
(The other idea is that Mordecai was originally going to beat Sombrero World by going up a dangerous pass, stop at the top, and then rush toward Sombrero World as it came at the truck and do a skid through its legs, leaving Sombrero World to topple into a canyon. Yes, I completely knocked off the ending to the great Richard Matheson/Steven Spielberg TV-movie DUEL. It seemed like a fitting cultural homage for REGULAR SHOW, but that would have required at least three more pages and there just wasn’t room. So the story wound up with a much more expeditious resolution…)
PAGE SEVEN – WILL ADD IN TICKING CLOCK LATER
PANEL ONE: Close on Mordecai and Rigby in the truck, seen through the windshield. Mordecai is hunched close to the wheel, really determined.
RIGBY: What are you doing, man?
MORDECAI: What we do best on these trips…
PANEL TWO: The truck ZOOMS into a tunnel that reads “10-FOOT CLEARANCE”
MORDECAI: …take a shortcut!
(ZACK NOTES: I justified this to myself by having Mordecai specifically mention NO shortcuts back on Page 3, so there was, like, structure! But yeah, it was improvising under pressure)
PANEL THREE: Sombrero World bumps its Poncho-head against the entrance trying to follow…it can’t.
PANEL FOUR: BIGGEST PANEL OF THE PAGE: It raises up to the heavens and ROARS in agony, a couple spider-legs raised! (we see some tourists falling off). The Poncho-head is half-mutilated, giving it a Terminator-style look.
PANEL FIVE: In the truck, Mordecai and Rigby high-five.
MORDECAI AND RIGBY: OOOOOHHHHHH!
PAGE EIGHT: — WILL ADD IN TICKING CLOCK LATER
PANEL ONE: The truck peels into the parking lot of a building reading “CART DEALERSHIP”
PANEL TWO: Mordecai and Rigby rush in…
PANEL THREE: Inside, Mordecai has DIVED across the front desk and grabbed a telephone…
MORDECAI: Hello? Benson?
MORDECAI: We got here! We got the cart!
PANEL FOUR: Benson, in his room, is dumbstruck.
BENSON: Wow. I…I really believed you two were going to blow the deadline. This is amazing.
PANEL FIVE: Mordecai and Rigby stare in disbelief as they hear Benson go:
BENSON: I’m proud of you.
(ZACK NOTES: I wanted to give Mordecai and Rigby a rare victory, and have an emotional moment in the story. It’s not THAT emotional a moment, but Benson is sincere, and that’s something.)
PANEL SIX: A smiling Benson speaks into the phone:
BENSON: Oh, while you’re out there, one more thing I need you to do…
PANEL SEVEN: BIGGEST PANEL OF THE PAGE: Mordecai’s frozen as he hears Benson’s request.…as in the background, we see the Sombrero World Park outside the dealership, waiting for them. Rigby’s tugging at his arm, trying to get him to see it.
BENSON: (on phone) I’ve always wanted to get a hat from this place Sombrero World!
BENSON: (on phone) You think you could stop and get one for me?
BENSON: (on phone) …hello?
(ZACK NOTES: Not much to add, other than Brad McGInty condensed the last two panels into one and did a great job with giving the word balloons a certain rhythm that carried across the panel. Killer work!)
So anyway, that is my commentary on “Sombrero World.” I’m sure like three people will read and enjoy this post, and possibly learn something from it.
Come back next month for my commentary on my and Brad’s ADVENTURE TIME story, “Grocery Time” starring BILLY! And then pray that I get some more comics-writing work so I can do another of these.
December 11, 2012
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My strange, deeply unhealthy obsession with Cartoon Network’s ADVENTURE Time yeilded a bunch of pieces this year.
Here they are in chronological order, more or less.
This is actually from Dec.27 of last year, but eh, it’s still close — I talk with Ryan North about the KaBOOM! AT comic book.
Here’s an intro to the series on the eve of the comic book’s launch party at Chapel Hill Comics, who did an original cover.
Before Season Four premiered, I did an interview with series creator Pendleton Ward with guest-Qs by Paul Pope, Mike Allred, Joe Hill — and this original Tony Millionaire illustration of Lumpy Space Princess!
Here’s the conclusion to that Pen Ward interview, with guest-appearances by Scott McCloud, Scott Kurtz, and this special original illo by Tony Millionarire’s daughters Phoebe and Pearl!
I interviewed some of the people who worked on the show about their own comic book projects — here’s a talk I did with Tom Herpich, who did the above “Thank You,” along with “Goliad,” “Memory of a Memory” and “Too Young,” among many others. This is about his new comic WHITE CLAY.
Here’s a piece I did with Micahel DeForge, who’s designed props and things for such episdoes as “Beautopia” (seen above). This is about his online strip ANT COMIC and his print collection LOSE.
Here’s another interview I did with Pen Ward, about the influence of 1980s culture on his work.
Later, I talked with THE MAGICIANS novelist Lev Grossman (and his daughter Lily) about our obsession with ADVENTURE TIME.
And on a slight AT-tangent, I talked with A SOFTER WORLD writer Joey Comeau on the BRAVEST WARRIORS comic book from KaBoom!, based on Pen Ward’s new YouTube series.
Finally, I got many, many new additions to my collection of ADVENTURE TIME drawings by comic book artists. There is some pretty cool stuff in there, including things by guys who work on the show.
Yes, I’m aware I have a problem. I’m working on it.
February 14, 2012
Yes, I haven’t updated this site in forever. I was busy. And sick. And busy again. And disorganized. Well, new year, new opportunities, and here is some of the stuff I wrote that is worth archiving.
Pop Cultural and Nerd Icon John Hodgman came through town, so I talked to him about moustaches and the “Occupy” movement…
…and for Newsarama, where he expressed his thoughts on DC Comics’ “New 52″ relaunch (he doesn’t like it).
Continuing my brush with the highbrow, I talked with NPR’s lovely, funny and smart Brooke Gladstone about her excellent graphic novel THE INFLUENCING MACHINE with Josh Neufeld.
And Daniel Handler aka Lemony Snicket came through town to promtoe his book WHY WE BROKE UP, and we chatted about a bunch of odd stuff.
I talked to many webcomic creators, including Zach Weiner of SATURDAY MORNING BREAKFAST CEREAL, who even shared the script to an unused strip!
Brian K. Vaughan of Y: THE LAST MAN, RUNAWAYS and EX MACHINA talked with me briefly about his new Image comic SAGA…
…and with that book’s artist, the very cool Fiona Staples
I did a two-part interview with author Brian Selznick on his new prose/graphic novel hybrid WODNERSTRUCK — and talked about Martin Scorsese’s film of THE INVENTION OF HUGO CABRET, HUGO (now up for 11 Oscars)
And I discussed some cult comics, like John Arcudi and Doug Mahnke’s MAJOR BUMMER….
…and a three-part series on comics that need to be reprinted (a few of which have in the ensuing months)
And this essay on the cult 1980s’ show CAPTAIN POWER AND TEH SOLDIERS OF THE FUTURE coming out on DVD, which proved strangely popular online.
Toward the end of 2011, I became obsessed with Cartoon Network’s cult hit ADVENTURE TIME.
First, I chatted briefly with creator Pen Ward and voice actors Tom Kenny and Jeremy Shada at a press junket at New York Comic-Con…
Later, BOOM! Studios announced an ADVENTURE TIME comic, and I talked with that book’s writer, Ryan North of the amazing DINOSAUR COMICS
And for the coupe-de-gras, I talked with ADVENTURE TIME creator Pen Ward at length, with guest-questions from Mike Allred, Joe Hill, Scott Kurtz, Lev Grossman, Nicholas Gurewitch, and even a guest-art piece by Tony Millionaire!
In January, the daytime soap opera ONE LIFE TO LIVE ended, so I talked to local author Michael Malone, a former headwriter of the show, for a piece that included many clips from his era
And for some reason, I wrote about the weirdly compelling awfulness of ONE TREE HILL, with clips. Including one where a dog eats a heart.
Well, that’s most of the best stuff. I’m pretty awesome, aren’t I?
October 19, 2010
Paul Dini is a name well-known to comic fans for his work in comics and animation, most prominently on Batman: The Animated Series and such DC books as Zatanna and Gotham City Sirens. But now, the four-time Emmy winner has launched his own show, and it’s…live action?! On Cartoon Network?!
Hold on. You might like this one.
November 20, 2007
BACK TO THE BEGINNING: AMY WOLFRAM ON TEEN TITANS: YEAR ONE
by Zack Smith
You probably haven’t read any of Amy Wolfram’s work…but most comic fans have probably seen it. Wolfram, who served as a writer and story editor on the Cartoon Networks’s Teen Titans animated series, makes the leap to print this January with DC’s Teen Titans: Year One, a look back at the original incarnation of one of DC’s most enduring super-teams written by Wolfram and illustrated by Karl Kerschl. Wolfram gave us the scoop on what to expect from her comics debut, and what it’s been like going from the animated Titans to their comic book inspirations.
Full story here.